PDaddy wrote:Find another topic, and spend at least three months writing your personal statement. You need an essay that is balanced in ethos (credibility and leadership), pathos (emotional appeal), mythos (symbolism, syllogisms and metaphors), and logos (logic).
If your topic doesn't allow you to invoke those elements, it isn't a good essay. Good writers can use two with good skill. Great writers can effectively employ three. Superior writers use all four, and tell compelling stories while doing it. I would not admit you based on this personal statement.
Write from the heart, but always remember your audience. That means, anticipating the questions that the adcom members will have as they read your essay and answering those questions as the essay proceeds. To do this, you must be critical of yourself...self-aware. And you must be willing to admit shortcomings and show how you have changed or grown from your experiences. lastly, you must relate all of this to your desire to attend law school.
Remember also that you do not have to tell your "entire" story, but you must tell a "complete" story. If you don't close the show with a strong rhetorical finish, your essay will not be memorable.
Jesus dude, this is a law school personal statement we're talking about here. They don't even read these things. I wrote mine in an afternoon.