PS swap?

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Harlyn
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PS swap?

Postby Harlyn » Sat Jul 14, 2012 6:09 pm

If anyone is interested in doing a PS swap please PM me.

collegebum1989
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Re: PS swap?

Postby collegebum1989 » Mon Jul 16, 2012 11:59 am

I'm interested! Try to see how I can shorten this:

My PS is below:

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Last edited by collegebum1989 on Mon Jul 16, 2012 4:28 pm, edited 1 time in total.

CanadianWolf
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Re: PS swap?

Postby CanadianWolf » Mon Jul 16, 2012 12:51 pm

@collegebum1989: Your law school personal statement is much too repetitive. This makes your essay boring & predictable. To be blunt, you could randomly delete any three paragraphs & the quality of your writing would remain intact. Or you could try to express your thoughts in crisp, clear sentences & a more succinct fashion.

The main problem with your personal statement is that it is too full of unnecessary details & repetitive thoughts when readers are seeking insights about you & your development.

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CorkBoard
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Re: PS swap?

Postby CorkBoard » Mon Jul 16, 2012 1:01 pm

CollegeBum, your PS is vague, IMO, and doesn't really give me anything concrete about you. Like the poster above me mentioned, your PS is really repetitive. I think you should probably start over.

You also might want to start a new thread so you don't hijack this one.

collegebum1989
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Re: PS swap?

Postby collegebum1989 » Mon Jul 16, 2012 4:28 pm

thanks for the feedback, i've removed my PS from the thread.




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