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I like the yoga theme, but too many things going on at once. You jump from your education to your mother, without much of a transition (unless I missed it). Also, in your last paragraph you said you "maybe: want to better the community as a whole? I found that a little off putting. If you want to improve the community, then say it. If not, then don't say it.
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Yoga is a fitness craze that consists of flexible people doing intricate poses and
chant chanting their way to good health.
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