Very rough draft-- please critique!

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livelovelaugh49
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Very rough draft-- please critique!

Postby livelovelaugh49 » Thu Jan 05, 2012 3:23 pm

Fail!
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postn0bills
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Re: Very rough draft-- please critique!

Postby postn0bills » Thu Jan 05, 2012 6:00 pm

I think you should pick a new topic. While this reveals a realization you had, it's an uncomfortable read and lacks real insight into you as a person.

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stab master arson
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Re: Very rough draft-- please critique!

Postby stab master arson » Thu Jan 05, 2012 7:03 pm

This was an excellent read. I disagree with ^this^ guy; it tells me lots about you as a person. It's just that none of it is good. :lol:

Pick a different topic.

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Re: Very rough draft-- please critique!

Postby bracton » Thu Jan 05, 2012 7:22 pm

I would tend to agree with the previous two posters. I think it was a good read, but a different topic would be better. The focus on the LSAT seems strange for a PS -- and because it's the necessary context for your statement, it would be better to choose something else.

FWIW, some schools even seem to hold the fact that you have taken an LSAT course against you. (Yale, for example.) If you're applying to schools who don't ask whether you've taken an LSAT course -- which I think is the vast majority -- then it might be better not to volunteer that fact.

livelovelaugh49
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Re: Very rough draft-- please critique!

Postby livelovelaugh49 » Thu Jan 05, 2012 8:01 pm

bracton wrote:I would tend to agree with the previous two posters. I think it was a good read, but a different topic would be better. The focus on the LSAT seems strange for a PS -- and because it's the necessary context for your statement, it would be better to choose something else.

FWIW, some schools even seem to hold the fact that you have taken an LSAT course against you. (Yale, for example.) If you're applying to schools who don't ask whether you've taken an LSAT course -- which I think is the vast majority -- then it might be better not to volunteer that fact.


I truly appreciate your advice! Good to know about not mentioning the LSAT at all too... welp, on to my next topic!

livelovelaugh49
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Re: Very rough draft-- please critique!

Postby livelovelaugh49 » Thu Jan 05, 2012 8:01 pm

stab master arson wrote:This was an excellent read. I disagree with ^this^ guy; it tells me lots about you as a person. It's just that none of it is good. :lol:

Pick a different topic.


Thanks for the sarcasm :lol:

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Re: Very rough draft-- please critique!

Postby livelovelaugh49 » Thu Jan 05, 2012 8:02 pm

postn0bills wrote:I think you should pick a new topic. While this reveals a realization you had, it's an uncomfortable read and lacks real insight into you as a person.


I appreciate it. Now I can scratch this one off the list of potential essay possibilities! Thanks!




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