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[juju96]

Is this punctuated properly?

"This incident taught me two invaluable lessons: First, I realized my introductory courses in philosophy had somewhat less than sufficiently prepared me for disagreement with world-renowned philosophers. Secondly, and paramount, I was reminded that justice essentially guides the pursuit of a good life."

[ph14]

Is this punctuated properly?

"This incident taught me two invaluable lessons: fFirst, I realized my introductory courses in philosophy had somewhat less than sufficiently prepared me for disagreement with world-renowned philosophers.; sSecond,ly, and paramount, I was reminded that justice essentially guides the pursuit of a good life."

[juju96]

thanks ph14 seems right.

any one else concur? about to submit just want to be sure

[ph14]

thanks ph14 seems right.

any one else concur? about to submit just want to be sure

Personally I would take out the first reason and focus on the second one, it's much more poignant.

[juju96]

first was an attempt at a joke haha. not sure if it comes across that way

[ph14]

first was an attempt at a joke haha. not sure if it comes across that way

It's hard to tell in writing. I didn't read it that way. I wouldn't want to risk it with the adcomms.

Edit: If you did want to keep it a joke, flip them around. "first, it made me realize that justice is at the root of the good life; second, and more important, [joke]." I still would keep it out though.

[juju96]

thanks for the input!

[Renzo]

thanks ph14 seems right.

any one else concur? about to submit just want to be sure

Personally I would take out the first reason and focus on the second one, it's much more poignant.

Nah, I'd keep it. Where you read poignant, I read melodrama. The humor of the first line helps temper the second.

[DocHawkeye]

Is this punctuated properly?

"This incident taught me two invaluable lessons: First, I realized my introductory courses in philosophy had somewhat less than sufficiently prepared me for disagreement with world-renowned philosophers. Secondly, and paramount, I was reminded that justice essentially guides the pursuit of a good life."

Punctuation is the least of your problems.

[theadvancededit]

Is this punctuated properly?

No.

"This incident taught me two invaluable lessons. First, I realized my introductory courses in philosophy had somewhat less than sufficiently prepared me for disagreement with world-renowned philosophers. Secondly, and more paramount importantly, I was reminded that justice essentially guides the pursuit of a good life."

It would also be helpful if you give this a bit more context.