pugilistjd wrote:Ok, I like some of what you said. But, just for shits and giggles, actually read the WHOLE PS and not two sentences. Then tell me if you actually can name anyone you know with my life story. Here's a hint: you don't.
Your life story is way less impressive and unique than you think. I know plenty of people who worked full-time during undergrad, plenty of non-trad students, plenty of people who dropped out of high school. Your PS was extremely boring because it seemed like you were trying to write a PS about overcoming adversity or excelling at something, and the story you told wasn't nearly impressive enough in either category to make a good PS.
And I did read your whole PS before writing this, and found crumpetsandtea's comments to be completely accurate. Don't try and tell your whole unimpressive life story in the PS.
A final note: proofread more carefully. Vaccuum? Obstain? Blaim?