Personal statement attributes

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john1990
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Personal statement attributes

Postby john1990 » Thu Oct 20, 2011 12:52 pm

For my personal statement i wrote a story about an extraordinary life event and I worked in that i am disadvantaged However, i want to work in more elements which answer the questions: Why do i want to go to law school? and Why should they admit me?

I have already explicitly stated that i want to be a lawyer to help people, which is what my story is all about. You can check it out here.
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Would it be a bad idea to say that i want to be a lawyer for the money and quality of life? I could work that into one well placed sentence. Obviously everyone goes to law school for the money, but i have a very idealistic essay, so would this help? I cant think of any other reasons to say i want to go besides just my love of learning. I could work that in but it might seem a little odd wherever i placed it.

Why should they take me
I hope that the fact that i was disadvantaged makes me more appealing because i appear to have more upside. My GPA was poor freshman year and they might link that to my PS. Are these reasons usually identical to the reasons that i want to go to law school? Also, can these reasons be implicit. I hope that from my actions in my story they see my character in a positive light and that answers this question for them.

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Re: Personal statement attributes

Postby minnesotamike » Thu Oct 20, 2011 1:02 pm

Would it be a bad idea to say that i want to be a lawyer for the money and quality of life?


Yes.

But the better questions is: "would it be a bad idea to want to be a lawyer for the money and quality of life?"

Yes. An emphatic yes.

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Re: Personal statement attributes

Postby franklyscarlet » Thu Oct 20, 2011 1:03 pm

also, "helping" people is alarmingly vague, though I'm assuming you qualify that in your statement.

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Re: Personal statement attributes

Postby john1990 » Thu Oct 20, 2011 1:04 pm

minnesotamike wrote:
Would it be a bad idea to say that i want to be a lawyer for the money and quality of life?


Yes.

But the better questions is: "would it be a bad idea to want to be a lawyer for the money and quality of life?"

Yes. An emphatic yes.


Basically everyone wants to be a lawyer for the money :arrow:

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Re: Personal statement attributes

Postby john1990 » Thu Oct 20, 2011 1:07 pm

franklyscarlet wrote:also, "helping" people is alarmingly vague, though I'm assuming you qualify that in your statement.


no i don't, although it can be inferred. Thanks for the tip ill clarify the various ways which i can help people as a lawyer and how that applies to the story

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Re: Personal statement attributes

Postby franklyscarlet » Thu Oct 20, 2011 1:08 pm

john1990 wrote:
franklyscarlet wrote:also, "helping" people is alarmingly vague, though I'm assuming you qualify that in your statement.


no i don't, although it can be inferred. Thanks for the tip ill clarify the various ways which i can help people as a lawyer and how that applies to the story


because I imagine they receive a ton of vague statements about helping people, I would focus in on a particular way, and why. For example, I focused on my experience with illness and why it makes me want to work in health care policy.

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Re: Personal statement attributes

Postby john1990 » Thu Oct 20, 2011 1:21 pm

franklyscarlet wrote:
john1990 wrote:
franklyscarlet wrote:also, "helping" people is alarmingly vague, though I'm assuming you qualify that in your statement.


no i don't, although it can be inferred. Thanks for the tip ill clarify the various ways which i can help people as a lawyer and how that applies to the story


because I imagine they receive a ton of vague statements about helping people, I would focus in on a particular way, and why. For example, I focused on my experience with illness and why it makes me want to work in health care policy.


that sounds like a great reason to go to law school. My PS is about saving my neighbor from someone who broke into her apartment. So, it is going to be harder for me to apply this because i'm 90% sure i want to go into the private sector. But, it helped me work in that i was disadvantaged. I guess ill say something like i want to help people obtain justice.

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Re: Personal statement attributes

Postby NiccoloA » Thu Oct 20, 2011 1:29 pm

john1990 wrote:
franklyscarlet wrote:
john1990 wrote:
franklyscarlet wrote:also, "helping" people is alarmingly vague, though I'm assuming you qualify that in your statement.


no i don't, although it can be inferred. Thanks for the tip ill clarify the various ways which i can help people as a lawyer and how that applies to the story


because I imagine they receive a ton of vague statements about helping people, I would focus in on a particular way, and why. For example, I focused on my experience with illness and why it makes me want to work in health care policy.


that sounds like a great reason to go to law school. My PS is about saving my neighbor from someone who broke into her apartment. So, it is going to be harder for me to apply this because i'm 90% sure i want to go into the private sector. But, it helped me work in that i was disadvantaged. I guess ill say something like i want to help people obtain justice.


You might want to change "saving" to "helping seek justice."

Even so, the idea that it is generally vague just seems unfair to me. Of course attributing your desire to be a lawyer to "helping people" is incredibly vague. Do you really want to write a letter about what you're probably going to be doing as a lawyer?

Even if it is helping people, they are likely not going to all be angels.

I despise the PS, myself. See no use for it other than something that could possibly screw up your admissions if you forget a period or a comma.




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