DS...need direction

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DS...need direction

Postby P-salms » Thu Oct 20, 2011 12:26 pm

interested in whether or not content has potential to make a decent DS.
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For many Black Americans, the question of, “what does it mean to be Black?” is perhaps the most important question that will be posed in regards to their identity formation. Black consciousness is nothing new and is especially captivating when dealing with Blacks’ attitudes towards racial identity. As a first generation African in America, defining racial identity in terms of the Black experience has always been an uphill struggle. For the most part, I have struggled to take ownership of an identity that, to me, imposes itself from an outside subculture. I have always viewed Black identity in the context of the Black experience- as a composite creation of multiple generations attempting to cast themselves from the shadows of slavery. My version of the Black experience is tied to pre-civil rights sensibilities.

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Re: DS...need direction

Postby thelawschoolproject » Thu Oct 20, 2011 7:09 pm

It seems as if your DS wouldn't be focused on you, but rather deconstructionist ideals of racial identity. And, while this would make a good paper, I don't think your DS is where you want to bring up those issues unless you're discussing your personal identity and its construction in your life.

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Re: DS...need direction

Postby P-salms » Fri Oct 21, 2011 10:34 am

I definitely see where you're coming from. So would you suggest scrapping the whole premise? Anyone else feel free to chime in..Thanks in advance

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Re: DS...need direction

Postby CanadianWolf » Fri Oct 21, 2011 10:49 am

My impression is that your DS is going to include a lot of BS.

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Re: DS...need direction

Postby P-salms » Fri Oct 21, 2011 10:53 am

haha, what gives you that impression?

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Re: DS...need direction

Postby CanadianWolf » Fri Oct 21, 2011 10:56 am

The sample introductory paragraph included in the post starting this thread---especially the last two sentences.

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Re: DS...need direction

Postby P-salms » Fri Oct 21, 2011 10:58 am

so you're leaning towards scrap the whole thing? Any constructive suggestions? Thanks btw

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Re: DS...need direction

Postby CanadianWolf » Fri Oct 21, 2011 11:00 am

The last two sentences are overly broad. Try refining your DS to focus on you. How are you diverse & how has being diverse affected you ?

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Re: DS...need direction

Postby theadvancededit » Fri Oct 21, 2011 12:41 pm

CanadianWolf wrote:The last two sentences are overly broad. Try refining your DS to focus on you. How are you diverse & how has being diverse affected you ?


Describing your diverse experience from an academic standpoint can work, but you have to be careful not to stray from the main topic-- you.

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Re: DS...need direction

Postby P-salms » Sun Oct 23, 2011 8:25 pm

would anyone of you care to review my PS?

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Re: DS...need direction

Postby thelawschoolproject » Mon Oct 24, 2011 12:20 am

P-salms wrote:would anyone of you care to review my PS?



PM it to me and I'll look it over.

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Re: DS...need direction

Postby BlakcMajikc » Mon Oct 24, 2011 5:50 am

P-salms wrote:interested in whether or not content has potential to make a decent DS.
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For many Black Americans, the question of, “what does it mean to be Black?” is perhaps the most important question that will be posed in regards to their identity formation. Black consciousness is nothing new and is especially captivating when dealing with Blacks’ attitudes towards racial identity. As a first generation African in America, defining racial identity in terms of the Black experience has always been an uphill struggle. For the most part, I have struggled to take ownership of an identity that, to me, imposes itself from an outside subculture. I have always viewed Black identity in the context of the Black experience- as a composite creation of multiple generations attempting to cast themselves from the shadows of slavery. My version of the Black experience is tied to pre-civil rights sensibilities.


These are the only two sentences with usable content in this paragraph. Use the potential from these two and try again.




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