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rishabhagny

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Personal Statement Draft: Opinions Please

Post by rishabhagny » Mon Oct 17, 2011 7:27 pm

Deleted; re-wrote it!
Last edited by rishabhagny on Fri Oct 21, 2011 4:54 pm, edited 1 time in total.

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Re: Personal Statement Draft: Opinions Please

Post by CanadianWolf » Mon Oct 17, 2011 7:32 pm

The expression is "deep-seated", not "deep-seeded". ("Deep-rooted" is also acceptable.)

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Re: Personal Statement Draft: Opinions Please

Post by CanadianWolf » Mon Oct 17, 2011 7:40 pm

You lose credibility when writing that "...the distaste for my own name was the most substantial challenge I would ever face." & "No other challenge can rival that of severe distaste for one's name." These declarations are pure garbage. Otherwise, you are a capable writer with an interesting theme.

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Re: Personal Statement Draft: Opinions Please

Post by rishabhagny » Mon Oct 17, 2011 8:00 pm

Thank you very much for your inputs; much appreciated!

Do you have any suggestions on a steps to take from here? I did not know how this PS ranks amongst others and/or how it would be perceived. I also had concerns on how much more I should write, what I had written is nearly two pages double spaced.

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Re: Personal Statement Draft: Opinions Please

Post by CaliforniaGurl » Mon Oct 17, 2011 8:26 pm

Sorry, but I disagree with Canadian Wolf. My intention is not to be mean here, but your PS does not make you seem like a likable, worldly person, but rather an insular person with huge insecurities. Thousands of people will be applying to law schools from different parts of the world, and their names have constantly been butchered. I myself has had it done to me several times and still do from time to time. Definitely reconsider the topic or at least a shift in balance in the topic as at this point, it's about 80% fear and humiliation and 20%, what you would consider a significant achievement.

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Re: Personal Statement Draft: Opinions Please

Post by rishabhagny » Mon Oct 17, 2011 8:32 pm

Thank you for your input. I definitely see where you are coming from.

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Re: Personal Statement Draft: Opinions Please

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