I would appreciate all of your comments again because it definitely has helped me out a lot.
Thank you again.
P.S. More thank-yous are in the bump.
decentalias wrote:The children I tutor ask me questions like if I am a giant or wear a size 100 shoe. For my part, I stand still and do my best jungle gym impression as they climb all over me. We have an easy relationship. When the LAPS (spell it out the first time) director offered me the job, he cited my qualifications as being "goofy and sociable." I guess it pays to be 6 foot 6 and have the patience of Job. At risk eight- to twelve-year-olds need their questions answered; they need jungle gyms; and, they need to know how to read.
Promising that I am not a Giant, answering if I wear size one hundred shoes, and serving as a mobile 6’6” jungle gym encompassed my only experience with children. Despite this, the LAPS program director informed me that my “goofy and sociable” disposition gained me a tutoring position. Before I worked out if “goofy” was a compliment, I found myself at XXX Elementary as an afterschool tutor for "at-risk" 8-12 year olds.
imjustjoking22 wrote:This is already a million times better. PM it to me if you want a more detailed grammar edit, that could be improved but just in readability alone you have increased exponentially...also, I like this "you" MUCH more (in terms of how you come across to a reader).
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