Critique Forum
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Re: Critique
This essay is likely to harm your chances for admission to competitive law schools primarily because it is not succinct. As is, your essay is too wordy & repetitive while offering only superficial insights to your view of the world, what motivates you & your development. The superfluous & shallow nature of this writing makes it unfocused & unconvincing, in my opinion.
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Re: Critique
I agree. It is shallow. I might want to provide more insight into some of the topics I discuss, especially the topics involving my own experiences, and cut down on the topics that do not necessarily involve me personally. Thank you!
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Re: Critique
Too much here - this is what adcomms critique as "A resume in essay format." Find 1-2 stories that encapsulate your character - I'm sure they're in there. This topic area, on its own, has some promise - Best, Dani
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