Near FInal Draft, need grammar/punctuation edits

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nucky thompson
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Near FInal Draft, need grammar/punctuation edits

Postby nucky thompson » Fri Sep 16, 2011 9:21 am

Near Final Draft, need grammar/punctuation edits
Last edited by nucky thompson on Fri Sep 16, 2011 9:56 pm, edited 1 time in total.

CanadianWolf
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Re: Near FInal Draft, need grammar/punctuation edits

Postby CanadianWolf » Fri Sep 16, 2011 10:39 am

Last paragraph: CHANGE: "...the idea of law school..." to "...the idea of attending law school...".

CHANGE: "thoroughly impressed" to "favorably impressed" (since an impression can be negative as well as positive).

First sentence of the second paragraph: Is the semi-colon (;) necessary ?

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Re: Near FInal Draft, need grammar/punctuation edits

Postby nucky thompson » Fri Sep 16, 2011 10:50 am

Thank you for another edit, CanadianWolf

I am not sure if the semi-colon is necessary or not - would a comma suffice? Also, am I using the correct tense of Creeping, or should it be crept?

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Re: Near FInal Draft, need grammar/punctuation edits

Postby CanadianWolf » Fri Sep 16, 2011 10:53 am

Better to use a comma or a dash (or use "with" angst creeping across her face). Basically, a semi-colon has two uses; as a substitute for a period between two closely related independent clauses and as a comma substitute to separate a list of multiple items.




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