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Post by PriOSky » Fri Sep 02, 2011 3:36 pm

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Re: need help with this one sentence

Post by kublaikahn » Fri Sep 02, 2011 8:52 pm

PriOSky wrote:
Is this sentence grammatically correct? Please don't quote. Thanks!
Who cares if it is grammatically correct. It is terribly written. Stay away from gerunds as the subject of your sentences. And try to say something with each breath that means something, rather than just leading your reader somewhere else.

Also, you only have one ancestry. It may be both Latino and Irish, but it is the only one you have.
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Re: need help with this one sentence

Post by kaiser » Fri Sep 02, 2011 8:56 pm

I would scrap this sentence and re-write it
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Re: need help with this one sentence

Post by Angrygeopolitically » Fri Sep 02, 2011 8:57 pm

kublaikahn wrote:
PriOSky wrote:
Is this sentence grammatically correct? Please don't quote. Thanks!
Who cares if it is grammatically correct. It is terribly written. Stay away from gerunds as the subject of your sentences. And try to say something with each breath that means something, rather than just leading your reader somewhere else.

Also, you only have one ancestry. It may be both Latino and Irish, but it is the only one you have.
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Re: need help with this one sentence

Post by redsox » Fri Sep 02, 2011 8:58 pm

kaiser wrote:
PriOSky wrote:"..."

Is this sentence grammatically correct? Please don't quote. Thanks!
I would scrap this sentence and re-write it
What part of "please don't quote" did you fail to understand?
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Re: need help with this one sentence

Post by kaiser » Fri Sep 02, 2011 9:00 pm

redsox wrote:
kaiser wrote:
PriOSky wrote:"..."

Is this sentence grammatically correct? Please don't quote. Thanks!
I would scrap this sentence and re-write it
What part of "please don't quote" did you fail to understand?
the "please don't quote" part
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Re: need help with this one sentence

Post by redsox » Fri Sep 02, 2011 9:03 pm

kaiser wrote:
redsox wrote:
kaiser wrote:
PriOSky wrote:"..."

Is this sentence grammatically correct? Please don't quote. Thanks!
I would scrap this sentence and re-write it
What part of "please don't quote" did you fail to understand?
the "please don't quote" part
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