Rough PS- Advice Needed! Forum

[ash0117]

DELETED. Thanks for the advice, I am going to write something different.

[horrorbusiness]

Frankly, (and I'm no expert, obviously), I really don't like this. The TLDR of this is: "I have a severely messed up sister, and I'm willing to leave her behind to go to law school". I just feel a bit underwhelmed by this.

[ash0117]

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[Kimberly]

I agree with previous. You have had difficult experiences that have probably shaped who you are and have probably contributed significantly to your maturity and life views. That said, IMHO, your PS should be about who you are, what you are looking for, and perhaps peripherally and briefly how past experiences have shaped those things. Try not to depress your readers.

[shoeshine]

I would completely re-do this. The subject matter is lacking. It tells me nothing about you. If you are going to describe a family hardship it is best to describe how you overcame that hardship. You could mention your family problems but make your PS about you.