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HELP! I think my PS is garbage!!!

Posted: Wed Jul 13, 2011 10:31 am
by iaiava
I just finished up writing my second PS and I think I'm going to trash this one. I don't think that it conveys anything to the reader. I'm not sure if its best to srap it or work on it. PM me and I will send it to you.

Re: HELP! I think my PS is garbage!!!

Posted: Wed Jul 13, 2011 10:53 am
by Moomoo2u
Fire at will

Re: HELP! I think my PS is garbage!!!

Posted: Wed Jul 13, 2011 10:56 am
by emciosn
I'll look at it if you want.

Re: HELP! I think my PS is garbage!!!

Posted: Wed Jul 13, 2011 11:01 am
by iaiava
Thanks guys, check your inboxes. Please if anyone else wants a read please let me know. I think that it needs a more identifiable theme and I may need to change the narritive.

Re: HELP! I think my PS is garbage!!!

Posted: Wed Jul 13, 2011 12:53 pm
by l'aviadora
Sure. PM me.

Re: HELP! I think my PS is garbage!!!

Posted: Wed Jul 13, 2011 3:11 pm
by curiouscat
I can look over it as well

Re: HELP! I think my PS is garbage!!!

Posted: Wed Jul 13, 2011 3:19 pm
by mmkitkat
I'd be happy to look over it as well

Re: HELP! I think my PS is garbage!!!

Posted: Wed Jul 13, 2011 3:26 pm
by PDaddy
It's good that you have made this assessment. if you, the writer, are unmoved by your story, chances are that your audiences will be as well. That having been said, wholesale scrapping is almost never a good idea. Because we law students tend to have such lofty expectations, we can be our own worst critics at times. There may be some really good elements in your PS from which you should expand.

When I first started writing PS's, I would take themes that should have been minor and make them central, and vice-versa. It could be that simple for you.

Also, try to weave together a central theme...a thread that tells who you are via the use of symbolisms, metaphors (Mythos), etc. Be sure that you move the reader on both intellectual (Ethos) and emotional (Pathos) levels. Lastly, be sure to subtly demonstrate that you can use logic (Logos) in your writing.

If you show that you can use all four while telling a believable story, you will write a believable and well-received essay.

Re: HELP! I think my PS is garbage!!!

Posted: Wed Jul 13, 2011 6:49 pm
by RonnyDworkin
I'll take a look. PM me.