Please read my Northwestern hold essay?

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Please read my Northwestern hold essay?

Postby fatduck » Sat Mar 26, 2011 11:24 pm

Just under 500 words, but I feel like it's solid (the limit is 750). Be brutal!

Prompt: Describe your version of a perfect day.

Just waking up this morning, I feel like I should thank God. I don't know why, but today seems kind of odd. The neighborhood dogs are quiet, and there's no smog. A delicious breakfast odor wafts up the stairs, strangely devoid of hog. I enjoy the meal, but did not overeat, as I've just received a call from a girl I want to get with. I arrange a date for later, and head out the door. Later, Moms!

Just yesterday I was wondering if I'd even live another 24 hours. Today, I'm not worried. I drop the top in my convertible, and try out my new hydraulic system. Everything's just going my way. I get a text from the aforementioned Kim, and stop, distracted, at a red light. Today must be perfect, because there isn't a carjacker in sight.

The day's still young, so I decide to meet some friends for a pick-up game. Boy, put me on the basketball court, and I am trouble. If I'm not careful I might score another triple double! My team wins, and I'm feeling like M.J. Today is such a perfect day.

I hit the showers to clean up, and I get nothing but respect from my opponents. This is fortunate, because in my neighborhood people get very serious about basketball, and on occasion threaten violence over a loss. It's true, I live in the ghetto, but today you wouldn't know it. In fact, I ran a red light in front of a police officer, and he didn't even give me a second look! I finally make it to my friend's house, but instead of enjoying this beautiful day, they're just hanging around watching MTV. I propose a game of dice; this mention grabs their attention. Little do they know that I can't seem to lose today. For an hour I roll nothing but sevens and elevens - I even backdoored Little Joe! Before long I'd taken all their money, and we switched to dominos, but I couldn't lose at bones, either. Tough luck, brothers!

I leave the house, reflecting on my good fortune, and remember that my date with Kim is fast approaching. I arrived at her house with some refreshments, but I must confess I was a bit nervous. Truth be told, I had been trying to get a date with Kim since the twelfth grade. We watched some basketball (the Lakers won, of course), had an enjoyable evening, though she eventually fell asleep.

I let her rest a bit before taking her back home. Everything's still going my way. It's almost two, but I'm starving, so I stop for a late-night snack at Fatburger. It feels like a dream, but I swear the Goodyear blimp was reading my name.

I finally make it home, tired but fulfilled. I lay down on my pillow, and drift into sleep, remembering the day's activities. 24 hours have passed, and I haven't fired my AK-47 once. Today truly was a perfect day.
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Re: Please read my Northwestern hold essay?

Postby Ford Prefect » Sat Mar 26, 2011 11:27 pm

Wow! This looks like an awesome day!

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Re: Please read my Northwestern hold essay?

Postby dr123 » Sat Mar 26, 2011 11:29 pm

Did the lakers beat the supersonics?

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Re: Please read my Northwestern hold essay?

Postby Hannibal » Sat Mar 26, 2011 11:29 pm

You'll definitely make it into Lawyerz Mansion with that one.

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Re: Please read my Northwestern hold essay?

Postby moopness » Sat Mar 26, 2011 11:49 pm

What is this I don't even

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Re: Please read my Northwestern hold essay?

Postby fatduck » Sun Mar 27, 2011 12:20 am

shameless bump

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Re: Please read my Northwestern hold essay?

Postby Hannibal » Sun Mar 27, 2011 1:15 am

fatduck wrote:Just under 500 words, but I feel like it's solid (the limit is 750). Be brutal!
Boy, put my on the basketball court, and I am trouble.


Looked over it again. Found this typo, otherwise it's pretty perfect.

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Re: Please read my Northwestern hold essay?

Postby fatduck » Sun Mar 27, 2011 1:19 am

Hannibal wrote:
fatduck wrote:Just under 500 words, but I feel like it's solid (the limit is 750). Be brutal!
Boy, put my on the basketball court, and I am trouble.


Looked over it again. Found this typo, otherwise it's pretty perfect.

phew, good catch!

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Re: Please read my Northwestern hold essay?

Postby fatduck » Sun Mar 27, 2011 4:00 am

definitely should have posted this in the lounge

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Re: Please read my Northwestern hold essay?

Postby drdolittle » Sun Mar 27, 2011 4:49 am

Ice Cube- It was a Good Day
Just wakin up in the mornin gotta thank God
I don’t know but today seems kinda odd
No barkin from the dog, no smog
And momma cooked a breakfast with no hog (damn)
I got my grub on, but didn’t pig out
Finally got a call from a girl I wanna dig out
(Whassup?) Hooked it up for later as I hit the do’
Thinkin will I live, another twenty-fo’
I gotta go cause I got me a drop top
And if I hit the switch, I can make the ass drop
Had to stop, at a red light
Lookin in my mirror and not a jacker in sight
And everything is alright
I got a beep from Kim, and she can fuck all night
Called up the homies and I’m askin y’all
Which park, are y’all playin basketball?
Get me on the court and I’m trouble
Last week fucked around and got a triple double
Freakin n*ggaz everyway like M.J.
I can’t believe, today was a good day (shit!)

White Translation
I just woke up. No one has killed me. Thank God!
Today seems peculiar
The dog is quiet. There is no smog
My mom cooked a nice breakfast
I ate a lot but not TOO much
I got a call from a girl I want to have relations with
I have to go because I have a convertible
My car is equipped with hydraulics, which makes the bottom of the car hit the ground
I looked in my rearview mirror. No one is trying to rob me.
That pleases me
I got a page from Kim. She likes to have lots of sex
Called up my friends. Where are you playing basketball?
I am really good at basketball
Last week I did really well. I scored 10 points, grabbed 10 rebounds and had 10 assists.
My moves are similar to Michael Jordan
Today was a good day (alright!)

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Re: Please read my Northwestern hold essay?

Postby FiveSermon » Sun Mar 27, 2011 4:53 am

"I should have ED'ed here. Forgive me and accept me please."

-Fatduck

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Re: Please read my Northwestern hold essay?

Postby CGI Fridays » Tue Apr 19, 2011 11:53 pm

fatduck wrote:definitely should have posted this in the lounge

True. But have a bump.

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Re: Please read my Northwestern hold essay?

Postby ResolutePear » Tue Apr 19, 2011 11:55 pm

Funny. My perfect day would involve winning the lottery. Twice.

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Re: Please read my Northwestern hold essay?

Postby Verity » Wed Apr 20, 2011 12:01 am

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