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Re: First Draft! Please critique
I got lost in the second and third paragraph. I think you have good content, but cut out a lot of the redundant explanations about travel and get to why you want to go to law school.
Also the Spanish immigrant comment in the last paragraph, what does that pertain to? I don't see a connection.
Also the Spanish immigrant comment in the last paragraph, what does that pertain to? I don't see a connection.
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Re: First Draft! Please critique
Hmm... Well I obviosly didn't explain myself well. The immigrant comment pertains to me returning to the US and reaching out to the Latino community and trying to help them assimilate etc.
Thanks for the quick reply
Thanks for the quick reply
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Re: First Draft! Please critique
anyone else?
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