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I like the topic, but should you keep it, then I think you need to do more with it. What you're talking about IS pretty amazing, so I don't think you need to keep reminding us about that. Right now, you basically just keep repeating how awesome this is in various different ways for the entire essay. Maybe take the emotional appeal of that wonder and use it as a launching pad for something more nuanced--like the moral/ethical/legal(though this might be risky) issues surrounding this technology. Also, I am pretty sure that we don't currently have the technology to grow a new heart from the stem cells in our hands. Anyway, I think there are about a million and fifty different (amazing) places you could take this topic. Good luck with it.
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