Confucianism DS..bad?

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atkpl
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Confucianism DS..bad?

Postby atkpl » Fri Nov 26, 2010 4:41 am

it's a first draft..

I tried to show Confucianism is not a religion.

Besides all the grammar errors and awkward wordings, do you guys think the content itself is ok??

I am applying to Fordham, do you think adcomm at Fordham will hate this content?

I really appreciate your time reading it.
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sophia.olive
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Re: Confucianism DS..bad?

Postby sophia.olive » Sat Nov 27, 2010 2:42 am

better.

Needs to be a little more clear.

Saltqjibo
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Re: Confucianism DS..bad?

Postby Saltqjibo » Sat Nov 27, 2010 3:40 am

This is way better than your last DS, you will need to get someone with strong grammer / editing skills to go over it before you hand it in though.

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You Gotta Have Faith
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Re: Confucianism DS..bad?

Postby You Gotta Have Faith » Sat Nov 27, 2010 3:49 am

Saltqjibo wrote:This is way better than your last DS, you will need to get someone with strong grammer / editing skills to go over it before you hand it in though.



hehehe, I'm sorry... I had to...

But it's in good spirit, I promise.

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sophia.olive
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Re: Confucianism DS..bad?

Postby sophia.olive » Sat Nov 27, 2010 4:00 am

Saltqjibo wrote:This is way better than your last DS, you will need to get someone with strong grammers / editing skills to go over it before you hand it in though.

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Re: Confucianism DS..bad?

Postby Saltqjibo » Sat Nov 27, 2010 4:22 am

That's why I didn't try to help him :)




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