Please Critique! Go hard on me!

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Please Critique! Go hard on me!

Postby DoniLynn » Fri Nov 12, 2010 4:59 am

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Re: I need help with my Personal Statement! Please Critique!

Postby ShuckingNotJiving » Fri Nov 12, 2010 8:12 am

you put your real name? delete that boo boo.

overall this is good. honest and has all the characteristics of a decent personal statement. the ending is a bit too hallmark for me. just my opinion, however.

does your mom really just up and quote Emerson like that? pretty hot.


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Re: Please Critique! Go hard on me!

Postby nikkilaw » Fri Nov 12, 2010 12:59 pm

Her and my father separated after eight years and two children together.

this sentence sounds awkward, consider revising.
overall, good content, needs work on the execution =)

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