PS (4th Draft) Advice/Criticism please! Ready to send?

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fannntastic
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PS (4th Draft) Advice/Criticism please! Ready to send?

Postby fannntastic » Thu Nov 11, 2010 10:46 pm

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CanadianWolf
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Re: Personal Statement (3rd Draft) Advice/Criticism please!

Postby CanadianWolf » Thu Nov 11, 2010 10:57 pm

This will work. Public interest law, however, is much broader than your narrowly refined definition. Your personal statement may raise concerns as to whether or not you are in therapy--which should be viewed as a positive--or, if not, why not ?

doglover24
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Re: Personal Statement (3rd Draft) Advice/Criticism please!

Postby doglover24 » Thu Nov 11, 2010 11:26 pm

i agree with the commenter above that your definition of public interest is quite narrow. Maybe "for me, public interest is about..."
also, sorry to nitpick but i would say CUNY Law School prides itself in etc and put that whole sentence in singular.

fannntastic
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Re: PS (3rd Draft Revised) Advice/Criticism please!

Postby fannntastic » Fri Nov 12, 2010 1:03 pm

thanks. i revised it a little bit. hope its a little better.




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