Final Draft - Diversity Statement - Your input is needed. Forum
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sankara
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Final Draft - Diversity Statement - Your input is needed.
Thanks.
Last edited by sankara on Thu Nov 11, 2010 1:11 am, edited 1 time in total.
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plenipotentiary
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Re: Final Draft - Diversity Statement - Your input is needed.
This is damn good. Sorry about your friend.
Some quibbles: You use the word "youth" a whole lot, so maybe try to switch it up a little.
This sentence is a little confusing/too long:" Episodes of laughter that have coalesced with the tears to mold me into a unique law school applicant with a desire to utilize his law degree to prevent a future generation from meeting [Q's] fate."
Some quibbles: You use the word "youth" a whole lot, so maybe try to switch it up a little.
This sentence is a little confusing/too long:" Episodes of laughter that have coalesced with the tears to mold me into a unique law school applicant with a desire to utilize his law degree to prevent a future generation from meeting [Q's] fate."
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sankara
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