Final Draft - Diversity Statement - Your input is needed.

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sankara
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Final Draft - Diversity Statement - Your input is needed.

Postby sankara » Wed Nov 10, 2010 11:27 pm

Thanks.
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plenipotentiary
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Re: Final Draft - Diversity Statement - Your input is needed.

Postby plenipotentiary » Wed Nov 10, 2010 11:47 pm

This is damn good. Sorry about your friend.

Some quibbles: You use the word "youth" a whole lot, so maybe try to switch it up a little.

This sentence is a little confusing/too long:" Episodes of laughter that have coalesced with the tears to mold me into a unique law school applicant with a desire to utilize his law degree to prevent a future generation from meeting [Q's] fate."

sankara
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Re: Final Draft - Diversity Statement - Your input is needed.

Postby sankara » Thu Nov 11, 2010 1:11 am

Thanks.




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