The final draft of my ps. How do you think?

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flyfree
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The final draft of my ps. How do you think?

Postby flyfree » Mon Nov 01, 2010 4:58 pm

INTELLECTUAL PROPERTY AND BEYOND
During the past decade, I have overcome incredible challenges and exciting transformations in order to reach the moment of becoming a lawyer. In brief, I have transformed from a Chinese student arriving here with only two suitcases to a patent professional counseling clients about their patent portfolios. While once a foreigner without a clue about the rules and norms of this society, I am now a permanent resident who actively engages contemporary political, social, and legal issues.
Academically, I have earned three degrees in three different engineering majors. The journey to obtain my Ph.D. degree is especially challenging. I came to the U.S. nine years ago, right after receiving my Master degree in China, in order to study microelectromechanical systems and nanotechnology, two cutting-edge technologies that were not available in China at that time. Culturally, it was such a bold and daring move on my part because I only knew American society depicted by Hollywood and NBA when I stepped onto the airplane to the United States. The daunting cultural and language barriers embarrassed me at almost every public event that I attended during the first year. Regardless, I persevered and pushed myself to my limit to engage myself with communities, strictly following the motto of “No pain, no gain.” At this same time, I successfully overcame academic barriers by spending an exceptional amount of time in the lab. Eventually, I not only obtained my Ph.D. degree in Mechanical Engineering, but also published four articles in prestigious journals.
Professionally, I have started a legal career as a Scientific Advisor who conducts patent prosecution in a prominent law firm located in New York City. After I got my Ph.D. degree, I made my mind to develop a career in intellectual property, fascinated by high respects received by this profession and great skills required to handle associated legal intricacies. It was unusually difficult to secure a position in this field because only a few positions were available. But, each time when I received a rejection letter, I wasn’t deterred. Rather, my belief about the society, “The sky is the limit,” encouraged me to further prepare myself for the next opportunity. After my current employer offered a position to me, I have impressed my colleagues by showing great initiative, intelligence, integrity, and an absolute commitment to delivering the highest quality of service to the firm’s clients. Under growing encouragement from the firm, I have decided to dedicate my time and efforts to obtain a law degree in order to attain the next level of my career.
My goal to study law reaches beyond becoming a patent attorney. Throughout all the years that I have pursued my ambitions in the U.S., the general pubic has warmly accepted me and rewarded me generously. Whenever I faced important moments in my life such as earning my degree and applying for a job, people evaluated my requests and applications solely based on my experiences, achievements, and character, rather than my skin color, nationality, or other prejudices. I have constantly wondered, “What makes people in this society treat me with such tolerance,” whose answer I should know even before I decided to come to the U.S. Owing to such an unresolved question and having a deep appreciation in my heart, I have decided to pursue a legal career in order to greater understand the fundamental value system driving this great society. In my determination, what is beyond intellectual property is a profound commitment that aims at learning, preserving, and promoting the essence of the social order here.

WhirledWorld
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Re: The final draft of my ps. How do you think?

Postby WhirledWorld » Tue Nov 02, 2010 12:27 pm

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WhirledWorld
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Re: The final draft of my ps. How do you think?

Postby WhirledWorld » Tue Nov 02, 2010 12:36 pm

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Chimichong
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Re: The final draft of my ps. How do you think?

Postby Chimichong » Sat Nov 06, 2010 5:13 pm

Probably want to fix this:

"the general pubic has warmly accepted me and rewarded me generously."

and change it to public.




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