Is this sentence okay grammatically?
My desire to become a lawyer, though nursed through my relationship with my father, helped me to see that I had to create an image of myself that was different from that of my father’s in order to pursue my goal.
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- Eugenie Danglars
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Re: help with one sentence!!
The grammar is ok.
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- Eugenie Danglars
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Re: help with one sentence!!
Semantically, the sentence is hard to follow. It's technically correct, but I had to read it twice slowly to get the meaning. Try breaking it into two sentences
- cinephile
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Re: help with one sentence!!
How about something like that? It'd be less wordy.csoloski wrote:My desire to become a lawyer, though nursed through my relationship with my father, helped meto see that I had tocreatean image of myself that was different from that of my father’san independent self-imagein order to pursue my goal.
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