Comma Question

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GettingReady2010
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Comma Question

Postby GettingReady2010 » Mon Oct 25, 2010 2:21 am

I've always been terrible with commas. Does this sentence warrant a comma after "revealing?"

"The University's emphasis on public interest is very revealing and is a major reason for why I want to attend BLANK."

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Re: Comma Question

Postby ChicagoRambler89 » Mon Oct 25, 2010 2:23 am

GettingReady2010 wrote:I've always been terrible with commas. Does this sentence warrant a comma after "revealing?"

"The University's emphasis on public interest is very revealing and is a major reason for why I want to attend BLANK."


Fo reals?

GettingReady2010
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Re: Comma Question

Postby GettingReady2010 » Mon Oct 25, 2010 2:35 am

Anyone?

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Shooter
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Re: Comma Question

Postby Shooter » Mon Oct 25, 2010 2:36 am

Yes, a comma belongs there.

No, you should not use this sentence in your statement.

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Eugenie Danglars
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Re: Comma Question

Postby Eugenie Danglars » Mon Oct 25, 2010 2:38 am

No comma.

You only need a common when you have two complete sentences joined by a conjunction (and, but, or, etc.)

The emphasis on PI is very revealing, and it is a major reason I want to go there.
vs.
The emphasis on PI is very revealing and is a major reason I want to go there.

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Re: Comma Question

Postby GettingReady2010 » Mon Oct 25, 2010 2:39 am

Shooter wrote:Yes, a comma belongs there.

No, you should not use this sentence in your statement.


Do you mind providing an explanation. The second half of that statement is an incomplete sentence.

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Re: Comma Question

Postby GettingReady2010 » Mon Oct 25, 2010 2:40 am

Eugenie Danglars wrote:No comma.

You only need a common when you have two complete sentences joined by a conjunction (and, but, or, etc.)

The emphasis on PI is very revealing, and it is a major reason I want to go there.
vs.
The emphasis on PI is very revealing and is a major reason I want to go there.


These were my thoughts exactly.

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Re: Comma Question

Postby Shooter » Mon Oct 25, 2010 2:42 am

I just don't think the sentence is that good. You can do better.

Also, the poster above was correct with regard to the comma. It's late and I added an "it" while reading that wasn't actually present.

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Re: Comma Question

Postby Jack Smirks » Mon Oct 25, 2010 3:07 am


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Re: Comma Question

Postby Jack Smirks » Mon Oct 25, 2010 3:08 am

Shooter wrote: I added an "it" while reading that wasn't actually present.

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Re: Comma Question

Postby RTFM » Mon Oct 25, 2010 8:17 pm

GettingReady2010 wrote:is very revealing


This makes no sense. What is its emphasis on public interest revealing? Just change the word and you'll be fine.

On second though, just get rid of it. "The University's emphasis on public interest is a [don't use the word major] reason that I want to attend BLANK."




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