slg123 wrote:AP-375 wrote:Maybe you're just looking for what you want to hear. While the previous responses have reflected an LSAT-worthy false dichotomy, here is an alternative perspective: As the good writer that you are, you have the capability of keeping this interesting theme (which you seem quite attached to) and reworking it, making it much more about you than about these other men. If I were you, I would spend 75% less space telling each man's life story (which contributes nothing) and instead spend that space talking about their individual impacts on you and the consequences of those relationships. If you can do that, you've got a unique, interesting, and most importantly, effective PS.
I like where you're going with this.
I thought about recommending this but I think it will be extremely difficult to personalize this statement while maintaining the relevancy of the four other individuals' stories and relating it to your own.. all in under two pages. If you think you can do it good luck, but I think the risk of turning this into a jumblefucked idea outweighs the reward of the unique approach.