PS first draft, please critique Forum
-
- Posts: 531
- Joined: Thu May 06, 2010 5:56 pm
PS first draft, please critique
.
Last edited by thegrayman on Wed Feb 26, 2014 10:15 pm, edited 1 time in total.
-
- Posts: 531
- Joined: Thu May 06, 2010 5:56 pm
Re: PS first draft, please critique
*bump* anyone have any input on this?
- annie2010
- Posts: 123
- Joined: Wed Jun 16, 2010 9:58 pm
Re: PS first draft, please critique
You definitely write clearly and you have a good start. But I think you need a lot more reflection on the deeper meaning of this story. What did this moment teach you and what does it show about you? Why do you want to go to law school? Although you don't always have to answer this question explicitly, I have no idea why you want to go to law school or really why you are a good candidate.
The third paragraph seems a little pointless. The balloon and candy bar comments downplay your achievement.
The third paragraph seems a little pointless. The balloon and candy bar comments downplay your achievement.
-
- Posts: 531
- Joined: Thu May 06, 2010 5:56 pm
Re: PS first draft, please critique
Thanks for the feedback, I'll change up some things about it. It seems like a lot of personal statements never really get into why the person wants to go to law school, so that was why I didn't really bother. I'll try and think of a way to get it in there.annie2010 wrote:You definitely write clearly and you have a good start. But I think you need a lot more reflection on the deeper meaning of this story. What did this moment teach you and what does it show about you? Why do you want to go to law school? Although you don't always have to answer this question explicitly, I have no idea why you want to go to law school or really why you are a good candidate.
The third paragraph seems a little pointless. The balloon and candy bar comments downplay your achievement.
Want to continue reading?
Register now to search topics and post comments!
Absolutely FREE!
Already a member? Login