Personal Statement about Defending Terrorists (Rough Draft)

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Personal Statement about Defending Terrorists (Rough Draft)

Postby oxford_don » Tue Oct 12, 2010 4:32 pm

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Re: Personal Statement about Defending Terrorists (Rough Draft)

Postby CanadianWolf » Tue Oct 12, 2010 4:58 pm

You have turned three short paragraphs of material into seven repetitive paragraphs. Lawyers are no longer paid by the word. Think quality not quantity.

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Re: Personal Statement about Defending Terrorists (Rough Draft)

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Re: Personal Statement about Defending Terrorists (Rough Draft)

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Re: Personal Statement about Defending Terrorists (Rough Draft)

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Re: Personal Statement about Defending Terrorists (Rough Draft)

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Taken down per OP's request.
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Re: Personal Statement about Defending Terrorists (Rough Draft)

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Re: Personal Statement about Defending Terrorists (Rough Draft)

Postby yuzu » Sat Oct 16, 2010 8:37 pm

Guantanamo was misspelled.

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Re: Personal Statement about Defending Terrorists (Rough Draft)

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Re: Personal Statement about Defending Terrorists (Rough Draft)

Postby bdubs » Sat Oct 16, 2010 9:48 pm

Can you more articulately say what exactly it was you did in assisting in Raja's defense? Reading this it just sounds like you listened to wiretaps. Were there any real outcomes or tangible lessons learned?

It seems a little too philosophical and not very concrete despite the fact that you did actual work.
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Re: Personal Statement about Defending Terrorists (Rough Draft)

Postby thegovernor » Sat Oct 16, 2010 10:22 pm

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Re: Personal Statement about Defending Terrorists (Rough Draft)

Postby kwais » Sat Oct 16, 2010 10:31 pm

thegovernor wrote:It's cool that your into defending terrorists...douche


good one. and sweet avatar. I bet you are really smart. how awesome is Palin?




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