Critique my 1st draft of arrest addendum

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190
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Critique my 1st draft of arrest addendum

Postby 190 » Tue Oct 12, 2010 8:37 am

Mmmm Law School..
Last edited by 190 on Thu Oct 28, 2010 7:48 am, edited 2 times in total.

bjc314
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Re: Critique my 1st draft of arrest addendum

Postby bjc314 » Tue Oct 12, 2010 9:07 am

I'm dealing with a similar situation. It seems like you've definitely turned things around, but I feel that calling it an "exceptional turnaround" could be counterproductive. It should be apparent from what you've accomplished that your turnaround was exceptional and explicitly mentioning it seems disingenuous. I would also omit the part about student government. Its not relevant to your disclosure, and I think you would be better served to highlighting this in your resume / personal statement.

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Re: Critique my 1st draft of arrest addendum

Postby 190 » Tue Oct 12, 2010 9:29 am

Yeah, I tried to sneak the student body president thing in there as I'm not sure how else I can highlight it. Good luck with your cycle! Hopefully we can both manage to make these positive rather than negative parts of our applications.




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