Here's my rough draft! I see a lot of "overcoming" stories on here (especially from fellow URMs). I tried to stay away from that convention, but I'm a bit unsure of how it's turned out. Let me know!
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EDIT: Taken off due to inactivity. Thanks for everyone's help. If you're still interested in critiquing it, PM me!
Alright, folks. Time to critique! Forum
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the_kidult
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Alright, folks. Time to critique!
Last edited by the_kidult on Sun Oct 10, 2010 7:30 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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CanadianWolf
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Re: Alright, folks. Time to critique!
This is an excellent example of a strong personal statement.
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the_kidult
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Re: Alright, folks. Time to critique!
Thanks!CanadianWolf wrote:This is an excellent example of a strong personal statement.
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bdubs
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Re: Alright, folks. Time to critique!
I also think it is good. A minor note, it looks like you went a bit hyphen happy throughout your statement. I would go through and recheck if each instance of a hyphen is grammatically correct.
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