Read my PS? Thanks in advance.

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agenthero
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Read my PS? Thanks in advance.

Postby agenthero » Mon Aug 23, 2010 5:38 pm

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agenthero
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Re: Read my PS? Thanks in advance.

Postby agenthero » Mon Aug 23, 2010 8:55 pm

No thoughts?

CanadianWolf
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Re: Read my PS? Thanks in advance.

Postby CanadianWolf » Mon Aug 23, 2010 9:07 pm

Not good. Your essay seems to be a superficial accounting of various news stories & experiences that you have encountered over the past few years.




















In all seriousness, you lost credibility in your first paragraph by suggesting equal pay for elementary school teachers & a successful SEC football coach. The rest of your personal statement is overly simplistic & does nothing to make your candidacy more attractive to law schools.
On the positive side, you write well, but there should be more depth in your thoughts.
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agenthero
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Re: Read my PS? Thanks in advance.

Postby agenthero » Mon Aug 23, 2010 10:33 pm

Thank you.




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