PS First Sentences

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DorianGray89
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PS First Sentences

Postby DorianGray89 » Thu Jul 29, 2010 11:26 am

First sentences are important because they are meant to grab the reader's attention. What is/was your first sentence?

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Fresh
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Re: PS First Sentences

Postby Fresh » Thu Jul 29, 2010 11:27 am

DorianGray89 wrote:First sentences are important because they are meant to grab the reader's attention. What is/was your first sentence?


COCK -N- BALLS; BOY DO I WANNA GO TO LAW SKOOL!


It worked for me..

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Re: PS First Sentences

Postby ArchRoark » Thu Jul 29, 2010 11:45 am

How to Write a Strong Introduction

1. Attention-grabbing material: Hook them with a remarkable or a life-changing experience, an anecdote, or a question that will be answered by your law school personal statement.

2. Benefits: Make your essay worth their time to read.

3. Credentials: Build ethos.

4. Direction: Tell them your thesis and structure.


1. Hook your reader immediately.
Admissions committees read thousands of law school personal statements, and a boring introduction will result in the reader skimming over rather than fully considering the rest of what you have to say. Write a strong introduction. Hook your reader with a remarkable or a life-changing experience, an anecdote, a vivid description, or a question that will be answered by the rest of your personal statement. Your opening sentence is the most important part of your personal statement; use it to frame the meaning of every sentence that follows.


I usually start off with an anecdote/paint a picture of an experience.

From my DS:
With a thick British accent and a smile that overwhelmed his face my capstone geography professor had chosen to start the day's round table discussion with a seemingly simple question; "Where are you from?". As my peers listed off various locations dotting the United States I couldn't help but reflect on the distinct strands that have intertwined to form my own cultural heritage.


I had the same approach on my PS... but I ended up changing it because I couldn't tie in the story well enough to the rest of my PS.
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Re: PS First Sentences

Postby billyez » Thu Jul 29, 2010 1:49 pm

The first few sentences of my PS followed the same principle of Tiva's. It attempted to capture the reader immediately by painting them a picture of the event. It's by no means necessary and there are plenty of other ways to reel the reader in, but it's my preferred method.




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