Personal Statement Draft One... Rip Apart as Needed

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Personal Statement Draft One... Rip Apart as Needed

Postby divabole » Tue Jul 27, 2010 5:53 pm

Edited to remove.

Thank you for the feedback, will spend a few more days on it before presenting it again.
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Re: Personal Statement Draft One... Rip Apart as Needed

Postby CanadianWolf » Tue Jul 27, 2010 6:00 pm

Not good. Start over. This is just a chronological recitation of minor events in your life that aroused your interest. This personal statement is too superficial & offers scant insight into who you are & what influenced your development.

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Re: Personal Statement Draft One... Rip Apart as Needed

Postby Jack Smirks » Tue Jul 27, 2010 6:06 pm

Yeah this just reads like you're reciting your resume and transcripts, honestly I don't even know where to start with this.

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Re: Personal Statement Draft One... Rip Apart as Needed

Postby divabole » Tue Jul 27, 2010 6:11 pm

Thx for the feedback. Giving it another go.



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