nullisecundus wrote:So any thought on how terrible it is?
I cannot change it much, cos I just was not:
- extremely poor
- the only one in my family to go college ever
- black (still am not)
- Mexican (no)
- subject to any kind of serious tragedy of life-altering proportions.
So I have my job and how it relates to my desire to pursue a law career. This is what I could come up with. Any input will be greatly appreciated.
The fact that you put together an arbitrary list of attributes that you seem to consider necessary for writing a genuine personal statement is laughable. It's called a personal statement, that means it's personal to YOU, not black mexicans who have cancer and were molested.
Just imagine for a moment that someone came to you and said -- "Look, bro, (I'd imagine you have friends that call you 'bro') you wouldn't be a good law student / lawyer because you're not black, you were never poor, you don't have cancer, you were never molested, and you've never had any tragedy of life-altering proportions" how would you prove that they're wrong? Hopefully, you wouldn't say -- I worked for the Turkish Courts and hand them your resume. HOPEFULLY, you'd draw from your own life experiences that, believe it or not, don't have to be catastrophic, but show that you've lived, matured, and have some type of insight on how the world works, and how that relates to your potential in law school.
Now, if you haven't lived, matured, or gained any insight on how the world works then maybe you shouldn't be applying to law school. Jus sayin...
In all honesty, I only skimmed your Personal Statement, because it was too technical (lay off on the acronyms) and I didn't feel like I was reading about a person, but a type. There is a much-used phrase in writing: "show don't tell," and you do a lot of telling in your PS, but not nearly enough showing. Show how you're capable, don't just state "I'm capable." You seem to imply that all that you have is "your job" and your desire to pursue a career in law. THATS ALL YOU HAVE? IN LIFE?????