grammar question for my LOCI -_-, i know i know

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grammar question for my LOCI -_-, i know i know

Postby dudnaito » Fri Jun 04, 2010 2:25 am

I am drawn to its dedication to offer

I am drawn to its dedication in offering

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Re: grammar question for my LOCI -_-, i know i know

Postby MrKappus » Fri Jun 04, 2010 2:26 am

dudnaito wrote:I am drawn to its dedication to [strike]offer[/strike]

[strike]I am drawn to its dedication in offering[/strike]


Either's acceptable, but gerunds are sloppy. I'd edit as above...

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Re: grammar question for my LOCI -_-, i know i know

Postby dudnaito » Fri Jun 04, 2010 2:29 am

Thanks but what would u say would come after the "to"

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Re: grammar question for my LOCI -_-, i know i know

Postby MrKappus » Fri Jun 04, 2010 2:35 am

Whatever they're dedicated to doing.

I'm drawn to [name of school's] dedication to [e.g., practice-oriented instruction in its clinical programs]. Just my .02. It's mostly a style question, so feel free to disregard.

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Re: grammar question for my LOCI -_-, i know i know

Postby Learning Hand » Fri Jun 04, 2010 3:01 am

MrKappus wrote:
dudnaito wrote:I am drawn to its dedication to [strike]offer[/strike]

[strike]I am drawn to its dedication in offering[/strike]


Either's acceptable, but gerunds are sloppy. I'd edit as above...


L. Hand, concurring.

I concur with the outcome but disagree with MrKappus's overly broad statement that gerunds are sloppy.



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