Growing up, I spent time within prison walls amidst the flourishing trees and dirt road lined by verdant weeds, an image of the ideal African scenery. My time in the prison involved getting my hair braided by the female prisoners, but always with an armed guard present. Occasionally, an unconscious prisoner on the ground with nothing but white short? White shorts or a white shirt? and one sandaled foot strange would be in the way In the way of what? I'm not sure what this sentence really says . My mother’s work as a nurse brought her to the prison system with its vibrancy in Nigeria This is confusing. What is the vibrancy of the prison system? . The tranquility of the internal walls of the prison played against the violence that would often envelop the country [strike]often[/strike]. The cusps of chaos seemed to hold the country together almost as a certainty of daily life I'm not sure what that means exactly. I think I know what you're trying to convey, but there's something off about the structure. I didn’t have much control over the social conflicts that involved conflicts reword this. surrounding ethnic or religious differences. The tensions that surrounded my world with threats of kidnapping and[strike]/or[/strike] murder my parents decided What is the subject of this sentence supposed to be? to return to the United States.
I've only skimmed the rest, and there are some things that I really like about this, but you have a lot of problems with the structure of your sentences. It's getting late, so I'm going to leave this for tonight, but I'll look at it again tomorrow.