How Risky is Prose?

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brigun
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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby brigun » Fri Feb 12, 2010 3:40 pm

If it were Haiku, now that would be a different story altogether. :roll:

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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby oneforship » Fri Feb 12, 2010 3:40 pm

Nightrunner wrote:On TLS, I've wasted countless hours, and
so much can never be unread
I'm proud that this is post three thousand
rewarding the poet who started this thread

Your verse PS stands out from the crowd
the depth of your mission speaks for itself
it is no gimmick, but solemnly vowed
eschewing a meter to show them yourself

You're someone unique, it cries with its shriek
no punctuation; lines suddenly end!
your message is sleek and displays much technique
the 'no' pile it'll surely transcend!

your personal statement is the most pretty of prayers
but God, like Godspeed, says "no one cares."


good prose. excellent.

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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby Ragged » Fri Feb 12, 2010 3:41 pm

oneforship wrote:
Nightrunner wrote:On TLS, I've wasted countless hours, and
so much can never be unread
I'm proud that this is post three thousand
rewarding the poet who started this thread

Your verse PS stands out from the crowd
the depth of your mission speaks for itself
it is no gimmick, but solemnly vowed
eschewing a meter to show them yourself

You're someone unique, it cries with its shriek
no punctuation; lines suddenly end!
your message is sleek and displays much technique
the 'no' pile it'll surely transcend!

your personal statement is the most pretty of prayers
but God, like Godspeed, says "no one cares."


good prose. excellent.


Yes, thats some fantastic prose, nightrunner. :lol:

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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby Mickey Quicknumbers » Fri Feb 12, 2010 3:52 pm

Xnegd wrote:It's lessons are harsh but it's scent sweet as a rose,
I acknowledge the risk that I take with my prose.


I know you like to think your sh*t don't stank
but lean a little bit closer see that roses really smell like poo poo poo

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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby gaiustls » Fri Feb 12, 2010 4:01 pm

To apply I've authored a lim'rick.
Though you may opine it's a gimm'rick,
I find it refreshing,
And not so distressing
As the "prose" of some makes me bullim'rick.

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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby KMaine » Fri Feb 12, 2010 4:20 pm

Having been a high school English teacher for years, I can honestly say that this is one of the worst pieces I have ever read. You clearly have no idea of what poetry is. In fact, you think it is called prose.

Do not send this to reaches. It would likely give even extreme safeties a reason to reject you (and a justifiable one at that).

Comically bad.

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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby kittenmittons » Fri Feb 12, 2010 4:22 pm

ITT: Piling on

To be fair, I'm not talented enough to even write what OP did

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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby KMaine » Fri Feb 12, 2010 4:38 pm

kittenmittons wrote:ITT: Piling on

To be fair, I'm not talented enough to even write what OP did


But hopefully you are smart enough to know not to.

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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby Xnegd » Fri Feb 12, 2010 4:42 pm

KMaine wrote:
kittenmittons wrote:ITT: Piling on

To be fair, I'm not talented enough to even write what OP did


But hopefully you are smart enough to know not to.


Shouldn't an English teacher be smart enough not to start a sentence with "But?"

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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby fl0w » Fri Feb 12, 2010 4:43 pm

Xnegd wrote:
KMaine wrote:
kittenmittons wrote:ITT: Piling on

To be fair, I'm not talented enough to even write what OP did


But hopefully you are smart enough to know not to.


Shouldn't an English teacher be smart enough not to start a sentence with "But?"


I think that's actually acceptable. They just tell students to stay away from it to avoid writing fragments.

*disclaimer: i'm not an english teacher. so /shrug

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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby Mr. Matlock » Fri Feb 12, 2010 4:47 pm

Xnegd wrote:
KMaine wrote:
kittenmittons wrote:ITT: Piling on

To be fair, I'm not talented enough to even write what OP did


But hopefully you are smart enough to know not to.


Shouldn't an English teacher be smart enough not to start a sentence with "But?"

Little Lord Fauntleroy returns!

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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby Kobe_Teeth » Fri Feb 12, 2010 4:51 pm

AustinOrgans wrote:It's verse, and it's abysmal.



/thread.

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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby oneforship » Fri Feb 12, 2010 5:12 pm

Xnegd wrote:
KMaine wrote:
kittenmittons wrote:ITT: Piling on

To be fair, I'm not talented enough to even write what OP did


But hopefully you are smart enough to know not to.


Shouldn't an English teacher be smart enough not to start a sentence with "But?"


You can start sentences with "But". And "And".

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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby kittenmittons » Fri Feb 12, 2010 5:14 pm

Mr. Matlock wrote:
Xnegd wrote:
KMaine wrote:
kittenmittons wrote:ITT: Piling on

To be fair, I'm not talented enough to even write what OP did


But hopefully you are smart enough to know not to.


Shouldn't an English teacher be smart enough not to start a sentence with "But?"

Little Lord Fauntleroy returns!


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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby kittenmittons » Fri Feb 12, 2010 5:15 pm

Nightrunner wrote:
oneforship wrote:You can start sentences with "But". And "And".


Technically, it is a valid rhetorical device that makes your sentence appear as if it were a fragment. Most high school English teachers ignore that clause, because it is infinitely easier to teach high school students to spot fragments without it.


QF incorrect comma usage

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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby oneforship » Fri Feb 12, 2010 5:18 pm

Nightrunner wrote:
oneforship wrote:You can start sentences with "But". And "And".


Technically, it is a valid rhetorical device that makes your sentence appear as if it were a fragment. Most high school English teachers ignore that clause, because it is infinitely easier to teach high school students to spot fragments without it.


Mostly I'm pissed because I didn't start the first sentence with "But". fail.

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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby Zapatero » Fri Feb 12, 2010 5:20 pm

oneforship wrote:You can start sentences with "But". And "And".


I agree, but since we're getting technical, periods and commas always go inside quotation marks in American English. So it should be:
You can start sentences with "But." And "And."

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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby oneforship » Fri Feb 12, 2010 5:25 pm

ccs1702 wrote:
oneforship wrote:You can start sentences with "But". And "And".


I agree, but since we're getting technical, periods and commas always go inside quotation marks in American English. So it should be:
You can start sentences with "But." And "And."


this is correct. congrats.


by the way, I'm also supposed to capitalize my sentences when I begin them. but I'm not.

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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby Zapatero » Fri Feb 12, 2010 5:27 pm

oneforship wrote:
ccs1702 wrote:
oneforship wrote:You can start sentences with "But". And "And".


I agree, but since we're getting technical, periods and commas always go inside quotation marks in American English. So it should be:
You can start sentences with "But." And "And."


this is correct. congrats.


by the way, I'm also supposed to capitalize my sentences when I begin them. but I'm not.


I like your style.

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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby Borhas » Fri Feb 12, 2010 5:27 pm

I'm tempted to join the others mocking you and tell you to use that, and so I will

It's brilliant use it as your PS!

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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby gaiustls » Fri Feb 12, 2010 5:33 pm

ccs1702 wrote:
oneforship wrote:
ccs1702 wrote:
oneforship wrote:by the way, I'm also supposed to capitalize my sentences when I begin them. but I'm not.


I like your style.


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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby jnorsky » Fri Feb 12, 2010 5:38 pm

You should record yourself spittin those verses with the beat to Renegades blasting in the background, then send that in.

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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby 09042014 » Fri Feb 12, 2010 5:41 pm

I end my sentences with prepositions and blame it on my dialect.

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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby KMaine » Fri Feb 12, 2010 5:52 pm

A few issues. First, you may begin sentences with "but" and "and." It is also perfectly acceptable to end sentences with prepositions. An English teacher (and most other intelligent people) would know that different rules apply for standard written English and, for example, conversational English or posting random stuff on the internet. And though there are many different ways to write a good poem, there are also some poems that would make anyone cringe (see OP's "prose" for example).

Maybe I was a little harsh, so I am sorry. But posting that poem on TLS was like hanging a bag of bloody flesh in front of starving sharks. You had to see it coming. If you don't believe me, use it as your PS and watch the rejections roll in. Not smart enough to know not to start a sentence with "but" -- good stuff.

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Re: How Risky is Prose?

Postby Zapatero » Fri Feb 12, 2010 6:00 pm

Nightrunner wrote:
Desert Fox wrote:I end my sentences with prepositions and blame it on my dialect.

What do you do that for?


+1

A preposition is a terrible thing to end a sentence with.




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