(Personal Statement Examples, Advice, Critique, . . . )
5 posts • Page 1 of 1
- Posts: 45
- Joined: Sat Jan 30, 2010 1:00 pm
Thank you for the feedback! You are absolutely right about the "virtual autism encyclopedia"....it's out. As far as the first paragraph, I have really struggled with it. I can at least say that it isn't the crap that it once was, but I know it still needs work. Thanks again.
- Posts: 192
- Joined: Mon Oct 19, 2009 8:17 pm
Good overall essay. The first paragraph seemed too flowery at times; you would be better served getting to the point of the essay in a more direct fashion. Also, in the sentence beginning with "Next" in the first paragraph, I don't think you need a comma.
Who is online
The online users are hidden on this forum.