as far as content, writing this has been hard for me in that I come from a technical writing background. i tend to write dryly
No, you write badly. As I said, sorry to be the bearer of bad news, but that's the way it is. Your grammar, spelling, usage, sentence construction, paragraph construction, and paragraph transitions are awful. The writing is C- for a high-school junior.
I say this not to make you feel bad, but to try to help you understand how huge the difference is between this and a good PS. The bar is far higher than this for admission, and it's far far far higher than this for success in a good program, to say nothing of a job.
as for the negative comments, my lsat/gpa numbers will take care of any dumb hick assumptions
If you think so, then go for it. But believe me, Harvard doesn't care about your hunting habits. Actually, they do--they'd prefer you didn't have any.
Once again, I mean to be constructively critical here, not nasty. I'm just trying to get you to understand that your PS is WAY WAY WAY off the mark and needs to be ditched in favor of something smarter, better-written, and more strongly oriented toward attributes that will make you successful in law school. Not hunting, not being a hick from SD, not flying to Kentucky.
OK? That's my last word. Hope you hear it and take it to heart.