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Postby daizee » Fri Jan 15, 2010 5:39 pm

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Re: Addendum 2 - Please help

Postby 09042014 » Fri Jan 15, 2010 5:46 pm

Why are you telling them this? It seems like you are apologizing for going to school.

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Re: Addendum 2 - Too sob story?

Postby daizee » Fri Jan 15, 2010 5:48 pm

Because in another forum, someone mentioned to comment about the excessive years of education. If not necessary or poorly explained, then that's good?

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Re: Addendum 2 - Too sob story?

Postby 09042014 » Fri Jan 15, 2010 5:51 pm

daizee wrote:Because in another forum, someone mentioned to comment about the excessive years of education. If not necessary or poorly explained, then that's good?


I don't think it's necessary at all but lets see what other people think.

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Re: Addendum 2 - Not necessary????

Postby mattymatt » Fri Jan 15, 2010 5:51 pm

Not only is this a bit rambling, but I don't think it's necessary either.

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Postby daizee » Fri Jan 15, 2010 5:53 pm

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Re: Addendum 2 - Not necessary????

Postby JordynAsh » Fri Jan 15, 2010 5:53 pm

mattymatt wrote:Not only is this a bit rambling, but I don't think it's necessary either.

+1. This is kind of strange and sounds like a mini-PS/addendum combo.

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Re: Addendum 2 - Not necessary????

Postby vespertiliovir » Fri Jan 15, 2010 5:55 pm

daizee wrote:I enrolled in classes at the XXX school based upon two criterions

The plural of criterion is criteria.

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Re: Addendum 2 - Not necessary????

Postby daizee » Fri Jan 15, 2010 5:56 pm

So, not explanation necessary for taking classes and at times, withdrawing due to finances? The transcript is pretty ugly? My GPA reduced to 3.3 because of these years. So, no need for this type of commentary???

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Re: Addendum 2 - Not necessary????

Postby daizee » Fri Jan 15, 2010 5:57 pm

vespertiliovir wrote:
daizee wrote:I enrolled in classes at the XXX school based upon two criterions

The plural of criterion is criteria.

That's what I thought and the type editor changed it. THANK YOU for the clarification!!!!!

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Re: Addendum 2 - Too sob story?

Postby Lincoln » Fri Jan 15, 2010 5:58 pm

Desert Fox wrote:
daizee wrote:Because in another forum, someone mentioned to comment about the excessive years of education. If not necessary or poorly explained, then that's good?


I don't think it's necessary at all but lets see what other people think.


I actually feel not just that it's unnecessary, but that you should definitely not send it in. If you went to grad school for something very different (in the health care field?) I think it would be useful to the adcom to explain the reason for your change of careers in your PS and expanding upon your statement about exposure to law in your current job. But the text above makes you look unfocused and like you are, as stated earlier, apologising for your experience.

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Re: Addendum 2 - Not necessary????

Postby 09042014 » Fri Jan 15, 2010 6:00 pm

daizee wrote:So, not explanation necessary for taking classes and at times, withdrawing due to finances? The transcript is pretty ugly? My GPA reduced to 3.3 because of these years. So, no need for this type of commentary???



That might require an addendum, but don't send the one you wrote. You didn't even address that.

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Re: Addendum 2 - Not necessary????

Postby daizee » Fri Jan 15, 2010 6:09 pm

So it's better to be specific? My first copies had specifics and I ended up with this version because my life was really tough and too graphically sad. Supposedly sad isn't good, so was trying to avoid anything depressing.

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Re: Addendum 2 - Not necessary????

Postby Lincoln » Fri Jan 15, 2010 6:17 pm

daizee wrote:So it's better to be specific? My first copies had specifics and I ended up with this version because my life was really tough and too graphically sad. Supposedly sad isn't good, so was trying to avoid anything depressing.


I agree. Don't be a downer or play the pity card. If you are trying to address a period of your life when your grades dipped, be specific, and address why it doesn't reflect your overall potential. The text you posted above has no resemblance to an addendum that effectively addresses that issue.




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