Where to go from here? Forum

[thekingiv]

Thanks for the help, everyone.

[thekingiv]

With 33 views, I'm sure someone has an opinion.

All feedback is appreciated. I'm wondering whether to even stay on this topic or start from scratch again.

[BruceBarr]

are you doing public interest?

[Ragged]

I think the whole charity thing is a highly effective topic for a PS. You are right when you say that you might be trying too hard to connect it to being a lawyer.

[strike]I see many more similarities than differences between practicing law and delivering Meals on Wheels. While a lawyer is receiving money in return, they are providing an essential service that the client could not accomplish his/her goals without.[/strike]

I would not right that. ^

The very general idea seems to be that doing charity work made you like helping people and when you are a lawyer you will be able to keep helping them. No need to draw specific parrelels - that sounds a bit childish IMO.

[mattymatt]

It needs a lot of work. The common thread between your work with Meals on Wheels and how a lawyer similarly provides needed services to those who can't help themselves provides a solid foundation for a PS. You do need, however, to work a lot on really teasing out that thread--making sure that the connections are clear, and how one provided motivation for you to pursue a legal education.

While I feel that adcomms always appreciate brevity and being concise, this is a bit too short.

The first paragraph is a good start, and a few of the other sentences would provide good topic sentences for a more flushed-out version of what you have.

If you're looking for a whole new topic, U Cincinnati suggested an interesting topic choice. They mentioned writing about a historical figure, specific book/character, etc. that inspired or had a significant impact on you. It seems like that is a topic that could lead to a compelling and unique PS. Something to think about I suppose.

[thekingiv]

Great advice from everyone...Thank you.

[thekingiv]

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[thekingiv]

Would really appreciate any input. I will gladly read someone else's personal statement in return.

[zimbadimp]

Its really good. i don't like the part where you say "as I understand it" not really sured why.